Fumino's triumph approaching
Bokuben
>12 hours until spoilers
I sleep.
Foomcute
Urucute
Cutesumi
Macuteyu
FATzu!
Good OP, good thread.
Please don't let it die until the spoilers.
why so long?
So foomers and other anons, how would you improve foom's route?
Man this multiple ending thing really makes the conclusion of the girls feel underwhelming, I was fumino team at some point and I can't believe how little I care about this
Fuck his thread too.
I love Fumino
Fumino fixed
I didn't even finish the last season of Bokuben.
Bookworm thread.
>no beauty mark
Not my Fumino.
soon
can't believe bookworm got season 3! One reason is that's cheap as fuck to animate, I'd like to know if it actually boosted the novel sales. . . If that happened
3-7 I believe
Bluemino > Blackmino
by more FOOM
Me 2.
The start of the route was slow because how much 22i made Fumino repeat "sorry ricchan sorry blackie chan", that can be told in a variety of ways like an object reminding her both, certain word that Rizu or Uruka used is repeated by coincidence, or any kind, i'm not a mangaka, but 22i should be used to this kind of stuff more than me.
We can have both I guess. Myne is a qt.
it's like 99% foom!
3/5 nariyuki is a lucky guy
I only changed the start, she still saved Nariyuki but instead of feeling guilty for having him as her personal buttler she enjoyed herself with the Nariyuki then shit is going south when the doctor tells her that soon her leg would be fine and Uruka and Rizu tell her that they want to make chocolate, the rest keep it the same.
maybe 22i simply isn't used to long arcs? I mean, he had to cram Sawako's arc in order to fill 9 chapters for Rizu's arc
Post beautiful Fumino/Cute Fumino/Fumimemes
fumino=fork in the road
rizu=closet
asumi=chitose
mafuyu=karami zakari
For me, I've always been an advocate of the idea that foom's trying to hard to become her mother, that idea lents iteself to deconstruction considering that shizuru was a con artist and lied to her husband their whole married life, or he simply tried to see her for something she wasn't.
meds
Stop this. Be kind to Urufriends.
Maybe I'm in the wrong here for expecting a manga to have quality in the narrative, but mangakas could benefit from studying a book on literary composition and theory.
If he could make a quality arc like the sensei one then he must be able to do basic things like using different narrative resources to get to the same idea in a different way instead of repeating itself.
You guys have the correct idea. Mirroring her mother could have made her character more deep, justify the laptop arc and be interesting.
Cute foom
>If he could make a quality arc like the sensei one then he must be able to do basic things like using different narrative resources to get to the same idea in a different way instead of repeating itself.
I'm convinced he had some good story ideas planned out for the dumbass trio but they ended up falling through and he had to switch.
Most of my problems are in the first half dragging its feet and feeling stale too quickly.
Make the beginning more concise so Fumino's guilt shtick doesn't wear out its welcome too soon, provide more of Naryuki's pov earlier on so we can see his internal motivation of trying to live up to his dad and/or maybe see him feel closer to Fumino at the end of their time together relative to the start to better convey a sense of growing feelings. The former Naryuki change makes the talk with Fumino about how he's his own person have more of an impact, since as is the issue is introduced and resolved within the span of like 5 pages.
The trip is fine and Stacyzu paying Fumino back for helping her out in her arc is a great touch.
If 22i main source of inspiration is other manga his work is most likely to fall under the same cliches and tropes, even then I mangaged to enjoy it a lot, but foom's route has been so underwhelimg
I quit reading it when the anime came out partly because I was coming out of a manga phase and partly because I detest secondaries and new material tarnishing the source.
That would require fixing Fumino character as a whole, a boring character is bound to have a boring route, the problem is not the route itself, it's that Fumino will remain the exact same boring character with no development or depth.
To fix it i would start by keeping Blackmino or atleast snakemino, blackmino was an airhead with a sharp tounge that wasn't hyper aware of people feeligns but still had a subconcious level of awareness, that kind of character would fit the narrative presented in the entire manga as far as Fumino goes. Blackmino wouldn't feel guilty about spending time with Nariyuki, even after finding out about Uruka and Rizu feeligns, blackmino while she might felt a bit of guilt, it wouldn't rive her enitre character.
It would even aid with the snakemino thing, as she develops more feeligns, blackmino in her autism would legit have a reason to be jealous.
In her route, her own airheadness would also be a legit reason for Nariyuki to feel like he needs to take care of her and her sharp tounge and lack of self awareness would make her constantly say things to Nariyuki that makes her fall for her. Blackmino wouldn't assume that because Uruka confessed means that she lost, she would still try on out of her own will to get with Nariyuki even if it meant going against Rizu and Uruka and then Rizu and or Uruka would put her worries at ease by tellign her that is fine like they did in 1/5 and in this route.
Might be just me but i think this version of Fumino would be better because this one has a reason to feel guilty but still acts on her own will and has layers to her personality.
The route itself is relativelly ok but the problem is the lack of character in Fumino, so if you fix Fumino this route becomes a whole lot better.